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.The Von's RUTHLESS AGGRESSION STORYLINE Part 1-5 ADDED

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#1 Spot Callerz Wrestling

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Posted 20 November 2013 - 07:58 PM

Now before I start getting loads of replies telling me that this is in the wrong section I would like to make it apparent that I am aware of this. I am only posting this here because the WWE'13 boards are as good as dead and I would like to share this project with everyone. I promised storylines back in WWE'12 but I was able to begin making them in WWE'13. Thank you to all of the contributors for making this possible. There will be a couple stories posted here, each spanning 12 months. I would like for you all to COMMENT, LIKE, SHARE, and SUBSCRIBE to my Youtube page to see the rest of everything. BTW This is only the first week!
First Part of the story is posted at this link. ENJOY!

http://www.youtube.c...hnVU9jj3lBTilwQ

http://www.youtube.c...hnVU9jj3lBTilwQ

http://www.youtube.c...hnVU9jj3lBTilwQ

http://www.youtube.c...hnVU9jj3lBTilwQ

Please do not close or move this posting!

 

If you are still interested showlove, if not don't diminish the work I put in.


Edited by .The Von, 24 November 2013 - 09:15 AM.


#2 sandman67

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Posted 20 November 2013 - 09:26 PM

Why do you use an ugly Randy Orton CAW while the original Randy is in the game and looks perfect ?

 

Besides that, try to put your text in a way words are not split up between the top and bottom line, use the spacebar. 

 

 



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Posted 20 November 2013 - 10:10 PM

First off its no where near the Ruthless Aggression one and I wouldnt insult my hard work

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Posted 20 November 2013 - 11:27 PM

First off its no where near the Ruthless Aggression one and I wouldnt insult my hard work


That sounds like a threat...

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Posted 20 November 2013 - 11:48 PM

You sound like a very angry person. If you can't take constructive criticism and advice, I wouldn't advise you post your stuff on the internet for other people to comment on.

Also the swearing is kind of unnecessary. I stopped watching after I saw Cena drop the F bomb in the first cutscene. It makes it look very ameteurish.

Edited by CAWey Ledesma, 20 November 2013 - 11:56 PM.


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Posted 21 November 2013 - 01:24 AM

Don't know any of you so I won't let your petty comments effect my actions or work. And I've been on this site for years taking constructive criticism day in and day out, his first comment was not even close to being "constructive". If you guys were in my situation you would behave the same because I have inflicted no harm. I also didn't "threaten" anybody, I made a statement that I would not insult my work because that's not the purpose of being on this site. Thank you.

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Posted 21 November 2013 - 05:48 AM

This was a good idea at first, until I saw Vince on the couch. Then it started to go downhill a bit with John Cena telling Randy to "shut the *Censored* up" (without it being bleeped or edited out) and it just lost my attention. I get what you were trying to go for but there were sound problems, the camera was shaky for some odd reason, and I didn't understand why some of the backgrounds were black, some of them were backstage.

Story didn't catch my attention, like I said it was a good idea at first but I would've liked to see a more serious approach to this. 

Constructive criticism. 



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Posted 21 November 2013 - 01:30 PM

Well this is only the first episode so lets see where it goes from here. And what issue were you talking about the backgrounds being black?
Also the beginning where the superstars are pleading their cases are not "televised" but just the superstars talking to McMahon backstage. The next part where Cena says bullshit is acceptable for this time frame.

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Posted 24 November 2013 - 09:15 AM

update



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Posted 24 November 2013 - 09:32 AM

'13 stuff goes in the '13 section. Doesn't matter if the section is dead.







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